Go On Sad One - A Child’s tale

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Go On Sad One - A Child’s tale

Go on sad one,
go on and play.
Go on sad one,
turn night to day.

Seek joy and fun,
please do not stray
show everyone,
your merry way.

Go on sad one,
go on! Now play!
It’s not for you,
though come what may.

For don’t you know
what is your place?
If pained inside,
still smile on face.

For sacrifice
you must endure
for those to pain,
are not inured.

Go on sad one,
while it’s still day,
‘fore darkness falls,
upon your grave.


–Erthona


©2014

I rather like this work, it appears to flow better as the poem draws to an end, as if the choice of rhyme used comes easier. However I do agree that the use of simple rhyme does give the impression of reading this from a child's perspective, so your decision to do this works.


For sacrifice
you must endure
for those to pain,
are not inured.

Go on sad one,
while it’s still day,
‘fore darkness falls,
upon your grave.