07-03-2014, 10:02 PM
I'm trying to create short poems that a person can easily memorize so they can meditate on them while searching for their inner meaning. I was hoping to get some feedback on one.
There is a man I always see
who lost his life to eventually.
“If not now, another time.
Life can wait if I’m behind.”
But life’s not ours to bend and twist.
A moment gone is a moment missed.
You can live a life in the blink of an eye.
But not a life’s work in the time you die.
Life cares not what you meant;
It’s there to collect on the life you spent.
Thank you very much for any honest feedback. I will try to do my part to return the favour.
There is a man I always see
who lost his life to eventually.
“If not now, another time.
Life can wait if I’m behind.”
But life’s not ours to bend and twist.
A moment gone is a moment missed.
You can live a life in the blink of an eye.
But not a life’s work in the time you die.
Life cares not what you meant;
It’s there to collect on the life you spent.
Thank you very much for any honest feedback. I will try to do my part to return the favour.