The life

[Pyxx]

In the first stanza are you meaning to say, we believed you to be good, even though there was evil/hate in your eyes. If so, it seems a fairly convoluted path to get there. Overall, it seems you are taking something that is fairly straightforward and making its meaning less clear. Such as:

"You were found guilty and tried"

A person would be tried before being found guilty.

And is this phrase an encouragement, or is the tense incorrect?

"slit your wrists and make it right."

Most of the other lines have similar problems. You seem to use many lines to say a little, instead of using a few lines to say a lot.

On the positive side, your rhyme scheme holds up well, and you use some interesting rhymes, such as momentum-pendulum.

Dale

"And is this phrase an encouragement, or is the tense incorrect?"

...oh, it's an encouragement ^-^