The Turtle

[billy]

it reminds me of Lewiss Carroll's (sp) stuff mainly 'The Walrus And The Carpenter' not a lot to say about the poem dale, i like it for the same reasons i liked the walrus. i get it has a nonsense about it that the reader can see through in order to create their own story. (i'm sure it'll be a different one for every reader) it works for me which and so i only see the one nit. two actually, it Hemingway :J:

Owned

I knew him. I knew him well
enough to know that he liked
walking the line of ambiguity a suggestion would be to walk instead of walking
between what was too real, i like the use of too real as it connects to the hyperbole of the next line in a farcical yet subtle way.
and hyperbole,
on the sacred ground of sarcasm.
He liked pretending he was mercurial,
or dumb as dirt.
He liked almost reveling his true self,
which was neither mercurial nor dumb.
He would bask like a turtle on a rock
in the light of false modesty,
but quickly dive into the deep water
of obfuscation if someone came too close
to his protective shell.
On occasion he would drop pearls,
as if by accident,
and turds as if on purpose.
Living on the edge
of this fantasy was his life,
as he lay in a hammock,
unmoving,
on a beach somewhere
that Hemmingway had never gone,
and little brown women would bring him is and needed?
sticky rice and coconut drinks,
until the sun would fade
and he would bask in the light
of tiki torches painted by Gauguin.


–Erthona


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