06-25-2014, 09:33 AM
(06-25-2014, 09:11 AM)i pray to pills Wrote: i tried to write something about the sometimes called "seattle generation", from 90 's protests against the IMF and globalization until ocuppy everywhere etc. from a 3rd world big city point of view. That was the initial idea.
note that i'm not a english native speaker [ tried to begin a discussion about it here : http://www.pigpenpoetry.com/showthread.php?tid=14786 ]
and i'm really interested about to know exactly how these constructions sounds to native speakers all over;
that's also thought to be sort of a song;
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68
I wanna live in 68
I wanna dress in black
Break your windows
City smells like crack
generally, punctuation. But I like this stanza, it's a real attention getter. I like the break your windows; crack flow
I love my cigarettes and flags
Love my band
We are the Adolf Hitlers
Dogs, what a dirty sand.
the "and" kills all the momentum you had...
I got my little indigo girl
She's writing for the news
She knows everything about
How everybody feels
Every man in city
Watches her tv shows
Television won't
Ever be the same.
Television shows
Lock that door
Your boyfriend had a hat
Dogs, what a dirty floor.
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i just don't get it.