06-19-2014, 05:02 PM
if you made it a five word story you would distance yourself somewhat from the Hemingway attempt.
Innocence Lost: children's remains found though i do admit i like your six words better. meh on the colon, why use any punctuation at all?
if you use more than one line it's not needed. i saw the said item on the news then it sort of died away like the children, sad affair indeed.
it gives food for thought and that makes it worthy in my opinion. just play around with it to see if you can make it better.
Innocence Lost: children's remains found though i do admit i like your six words better. meh on the colon, why use any punctuation at all?
if you use more than one line it's not needed. i saw the said item on the news then it sort of died away like the children, sad affair indeed.
it gives food for thought and that makes it worthy in my opinion. just play around with it to see if you can make it better.
(06-10-2014, 03:30 AM)Jae Mc Donnell Wrote: Innocence Lost: and found, children's remains