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Days End
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06-19-2014, 01:03 AM
Maybe add a another line after the first one. More imagery. Another comparison to something kind of like the first line but more graphic to really stir up emotions. And then your "I'm still breathing 300 days in" well really feel powerful. I don't know though. I really do like this!
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Days End - by Tiger the Lion - 06-06-2014, 07:01 AM
RE: Days End - by rowens - 06-06-2014, 07:24 AM
RE: Days End - by Tiger the Lion - 06-06-2014, 08:14 AM
RE: Days End - by achenivi - 06-06-2014, 09:59 AM
RE: Days End - by LorettaYoung - 06-06-2014, 10:15 AM
RE: Days End - by Tiger the Lion - 06-09-2014, 06:32 AM
RE: Days End - by QDeathstar - 06-06-2014, 12:15 PM
RE: Days End - by nb - 06-08-2014, 09:15 PM
RE: Days End - by justcloudy - 06-08-2014, 11:54 PM
RE: Days End - by sandraleigh05 - 06-19-2014, 01:03 AM
RE: Days End - by Tiger the Lion - 06-19-2014, 01:26 AM
RE: Days End - by rowens - 06-19-2014, 05:35 AM
RE: Days End - by justcloudy - 06-19-2014, 06:56 AM
RE: Days End - by Tiger the Lion - 06-19-2014, 08:59 AM
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