Don't tell me Happy Father's Day

[billy]

as a pissed of ex who lost his girls, i'd like to have seen it as a bit more gritty. i think there's a lot of potential with the subject matter but it's subject matter that need to grip the reader with stronger images.

thanks for the read as always.

Happy Father’s Day

I was a father once,
until my ex-wife and the courts took
my girls away.

The court said, they don’t need use another word instead of court again, a suggestion would be judiciary or something else
your presence, they just need
you to pay.

My ex-wife who was turning them is who needed?
into amoral sluts said, "Just hand over the money, you once advised me to separate quotes from the rest of the poem, i suggest it back :J: into amoral sluts work for me. one can presumed that when they became sluts the mother had no need to carry on with such an act.
you've nothing of worth to say.

It's just like turning a trick, another [just]
so make it quick, dump your load,
and have a nice day."

I was a father once, now I’m just a and another
John who pays to get screwed, so don’t tell me,
“Happy Father’s Day!”



–Erthona



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