He's a Poet who Don't Know It.

[Truerenigma]

Hi Trueenigma: Thank you so much for taking the time to point me to a lot of problems with this poem, laughing, and I do appreciate the sense of humor. I would have to change the title, fix a lot of syntax, attempt to be less abstact:
a) despite syntax would it help to say "with pride he seeks to stature win"b)would change guide his place to "secure his place"
c) the nets are for fishing for praise, acceptance, etc. d)"profound but lacking liberty: haven't you ever met an uptight genius. e)an actor of classical literature; the words seem to have become an integral part of his being.f) his self apart; is his life an act, are all his words an act, separating him from life. g) even aged he want to be debonair.f) naked phantom; the exposed reality of his talent.g) the poetry lies in his heart a secret from himself. h) he doesn't hear his own poetry when he speaks, and would fear it if he did, i) growing old changes everything in life "with all of everything to doubt; aging brings change and doubt. I know about the rim thing now. All in all I do understand your critiques, now the title problem, I'm thinking of deleting this. I have explained my points, and I know the poem should show; and me not explain. Thanks so much for your thoughs and time, really, Best Loretta

Why, thank you very much Loretta, for showing appreciation for criticism.

Secure his place would be better prose. Stature win will never work in this century unless you are doing something so spectacular with it that it takes the literary world by storm. Though a bit of an anacoluthon, something like "Age brings change, when doubting everything", would make more sense, an uptight genius would simply be an uptight genius, not a profoundly smart but uptight genius, etc. but if I were you I would set this one aside for a little while (not delete) while you are using what you've learned to work on other poems, so that you can look at it later in a different light. I would expect that you are going to learn a lot very quickly.