06-16-2014, 11:35 PM
Writing a six word poem about children/babies is automatically going to be graded on the Hemingway scale, which is a scary thought and something that should probably be avoided.
With that being said, I think this is a powerful poem. I like your response on how this was inspired by the story in Ireland about the babies in the septic tank. I didn't know it was discovered by kids, but it makes your story even stronger as how traumatic it must have been for those children who found this. Your poem relates to the children who found the remains and to the children who were killed. I don't know if it's appropriate for a six word poem to have a title, but if it is, you may want to title it after the tragedy in Ireland to tie everything together. Great job and best of luck!
With that being said, I think this is a powerful poem. I like your response on how this was inspired by the story in Ireland about the babies in the septic tank. I didn't know it was discovered by kids, but it makes your story even stronger as how traumatic it must have been for those children who found this. Your poem relates to the children who found the remains and to the children who were killed. I don't know if it's appropriate for a six word poem to have a title, but if it is, you may want to title it after the tragedy in Ireland to tie everything together. Great job and best of luck!