06-16-2014, 11:09 PM
I think your poem would be even stronger if instead of it being specific to the Holocaust, the idea was expanded to show parents constant fear of their children being harmed. Whether it's a kidnapping, molestation, accidental, etc, I believe most parents live with constant worry. Maybe at times going to extremes to shelter their children.
You're lines "Parents vainly protecting children, fearing they'll die first" plays into this idea and is where I thought you were taking this. Initially, I thought the top lines were something an overly worrisome parent had brewed up in their head happening to their child.
Just my two cent. I hope it helps. Best of luck
You're lines "Parents vainly protecting children, fearing they'll die first" plays into this idea and is where I thought you were taking this. Initially, I thought the top lines were something an overly worrisome parent had brewed up in their head happening to their child.
Just my two cent. I hope it helps. Best of luck