What I Know About Alzheimer's

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I think instead of "others", "we" would be be a better fit.

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Original Version
I’ve always wondered
when father dreamed,
whether he remembered the names
of his grandchildren, whether he ever
left a path and wandered away,
yet was able to return,
even in a pouring rain

He’s buried now with a playground
beside his cemetery, with a headstone
etched in name and numbers so others
will remember, even if he couldn’t

His last years were sand, a gift
to be taken away; Alzheimer’s
was how his distance widened,
how the voices and names moved
farther and farther away

Sometimes, when I watched him,
I wondered whether he was ashamed
that he had been dreaming at all


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What I Know About Alzheimer’s

I’ve always wondered
if father dreamed, did he remember
the names of his grandchildren .

He’s buried now with a whirligig
beside his urn, a headstone etched I thought urns were only used in cremations?
in his name and dates so othersi'd suggest "we" here
will remember him, even if he couldn’t .

His last years were beach sand,
a gift to be taken away; Alzheimer’s
was how his distance widened,
how all the names moved
farther and farther awayi think this line needs fewer farthers and more imagery, also .

Sometimes, when I visited, I wondered
whether he was ashamed he could dream
at all.

Your "urn" comment is spot on. Thank you.

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Hello. I think this poem is very beautiful and honest, and kind of brutally so. I think that maybe you were just scratching the surface of something bigger. [/size][/font]

Hello Rachel Deavers. You are so right.