The Chamber

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This is my first post so I hope I critique correctly. I agree with LorretaYoung about getting rid of the drunk driving imagery: the rest of the poem is removed from the reader's present and the drunk driving bit seems to break the suspension of disbelief a bit. The poem is really quite brutal and ending with the Prussian Blue imagery is really quite scary considering that many people have bedrooms painted that color as I did when I was a kid. Overall, I think the work is quite thought-provoking and the imagery is very effective but could be made more so if the lines were made leaner.