06-15-2014, 12:10 PM
Thanks QDS for reading and commenting. I chose "joy" purposefully because I thought of it as a pinnacle, though I agree that enrichment, or growth might be tighter to the subject, I want joy to be the goal. You are right about the last stanza. It somehow morphed into a bit of a riddle with the introduction of "thirst". I think the ending could be strong with the right tweak. Appreciate your comments, thanks.