Go On Sad One - A Child’s tale

[Erthona]

Billy,

Thanks for giving it a read. It's primarily in iambic tetrameter, although a single line is broken into two. I didn't really think about a form when I wrote it. It is certainly a lament. In the larger context that this is a part of, this is the god Enki lamenting about what use the other gods put the first created humans to. Enki, as their creator thinks of them as his children, the other gods think of them as only tools. This single poem is from a greater set called the "Songs of Enoch" which is part of a much larger poem still. You have read excerpt of it that I posted several years ago called "The Sons of Sirion"

"syllable on the last line of each verse" I think all the lines have four syllables. Were you wanting 5 syllables on the last line? It's interesting that you were anticipating that. I don't think I could make that happen. Can you give me an example of what you thought should be there. I would really be interested in seeing that.

"i was also surprised not to see the go on line start every other verse."

I think that is a good thing isn't it?

Thanks for your suggestions,

Dale