06-12-2014, 11:30 AM
Paul,
"even more than the gravy."
I thought that the mixture of extremely long lines with short lines made the reading more difficult than it needed to be. I also agree with ella about capping the start of every line. Not only does it make the reading more difficult, but stylistically it disappeared in the 1950's.
My favorite line was "We had a three year affair with three minute popcorn".
dale the coffee smeller
"even more than the gravy."
I thought that the mixture of extremely long lines with short lines made the reading more difficult than it needed to be. I also agree with ella about capping the start of every line. Not only does it make the reading more difficult, but stylistically it disappeared in the 1950's.
My favorite line was "We had a three year affair with three minute popcorn".
dale the coffee smeller
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.