Six word story

[Joey Automata]

Innocence Lost: and found, children's remains

Seems too much like a rip-off of that one famous poem. Something about baby shoes. Let me find it real quick...

Here it is:

For sale: baby shoes, never worn.
-Hemingway

I just feel like, if you're gonna do a 6-word poem, try to make it as different from the only famous 6-word poem ever written. I'm not sure if you intended to make it very similar. You even did the colon ( : ) after the first two words, and the comma ( , ) after the next two word. You even mentioned "children's remains", while the original implies that a child died. However, how yours differs from the original (and I'm not sure if it's in a good way) is in the abstractness. Hemingway's way clear, unambiguous, and visual. Yours is sort of odd. You're trying to do a double meaning thing with the lost/found and children's remains. So, I think you're trying to say, children's remains are found (after being lost) and so is one's innocence. Just not really sure if it works. Hemingway's worked because it was so subtle and left everything up to the reader, but it was also unambiguous. I don't know how clever you want to get with these 6-word poems. That's probably why no one writes them.