06-11-2014, 01:40 PM
HI Junia, welcome to the site.
"Who can act as all those things for another?" "ask"?
There is a saying among poets, which is mostly true I suppose, "that if you need to explain it, it has probably failed". I don't think this needs an explanation at the end, it clearly communicates what you say in your note. On the other hand this is overly long and tends to repeat itself. It could easily be cut down to half the size and not lose anything.
Best of luck,
Dale
"Who can act as all those things for another?" "ask"?
There is a saying among poets, which is mostly true I suppose, "that if you need to explain it, it has probably failed". I don't think this needs an explanation at the end, it clearly communicates what you say in your note. On the other hand this is overly long and tends to repeat itself. It could easily be cut down to half the size and not lose anything.
Best of luck,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.