Cicada summer - final edit

[just mercedes]

Great read. I enjoyed this very much and couldn't find much to tweak that wasn't just my own preference. "glassy red pinhead eyes" might be too many adjectives without a comma or an "and" in there somewhere.
I especially liked "unoiled machine", and how all the natural imagery quickly turned mechanical and tense.
Paul

Yes - I knew there was one too many adjectives there but couldn't decide which to do away with. I think 'glassy' will go in the edit. Thanks for reading, and your comments.