06-11-2014, 08:02 AM
After I read your background on the poem, this is quite chilling. I obviously thought of Hemingway's six word story when I read your title, but this seems far more unnerving than his for some reason. Maybe because there are so many unfortunate deaths that could fit in with his and yours is more about a specific event? I'm not sure, but once I knew what you were writing about it became really good and really disturbing. Nice work!
I write what I see. Write to make it right, don't like where I be. I'd like to make it like the sights on TV. Quite the great life, so nice and easy.