#2

[QDeathstar]

Edit#1-
The silver-tongued Church bells
that murmur like a mist
gather in the hearts of worshipers,
but lift from the breast
of an Atheist.


Original-
The chiming of church bells
Rolls through like a mist
And weights, as leaves on the breast
Of an atheist

The edit is definitely a lot better. However, church bells ring loudly, they don't murmur.

Line four is kinda misty foggy to me.

Why leaves? Perhaps feathers would be more appropriate. They tickle, and then, if they are on the atheist, he can giggle because he is ticklish.