06-09-2014, 11:28 PM
I get this as a seductive piece directed to Mother Nature, or Mother Earth and her glory, although I could be wrong (been wrong before)
At any rate:
It Arrives
I hear the crackle and feel the boom,
light flashes and I can see
your stormy eyes staring seductively.
The aroma of virga fills the air,
A gust pushes chimes, they surrender.
The storm is coming.
The first drop wets a blade of grass,
erect, ready to accept the warmth
of summer's shower.
Everything feels intense now.
The vivid lightning, thumping thunder, and torrential rain.
The storm has came.
The verb "came" you have gotten comments on, I get. (more sexual double entendre) but it does read kind of awkwardly. Overall I really enjoyed the read.
bena
PS --funny note...first time I read virga as viagra.
At any rate:
It Arrives
I hear the crackle and feel the boom,
your stormy eyes staring seductively.
The aroma of virga fills the air,
A gust pushes chimes, they surrender.
The storm is coming.
The first drop wets a blade of grass,
erect, ready to accept the warmth
of summer's shower.
Everything feels intense now.
The vivid lightning, thumping thunder, and torrential rain.
The storm has came.
The verb "came" you have gotten comments on, I get. (more sexual double entendre) but it does read kind of awkwardly. Overall I really enjoyed the read.
bena
PS --funny note...first time I read virga as viagra.