Heroes: Lost But Not Forgotten - Feedback would be greatly appreciated Thanks
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I see one major issue which is one of my personal pet peeves....the line that ends in "lay" should be "lie" as the rest of the poem is in present tense and you lay your body only in the past. It's a common mistake, but since it effects the end rhyme not sure how to fix it.
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RE: Heroes: Lost But Not Forgotten - Feedback would be greatly appreciated Thanks - by bena - 06-09-2014, 04:19 PM



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