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Active Shooter / The Game
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06-08-2014, 01:56 AM
I have no issues with this (sharp and concise) poem, save for the title. Shooting is an action. There can there be no inactive shooters. Like, "innocent children" (which logically suggests the existence of some guilty children) popular parlance already contains too many redundancies. Indeed, the single word, "shooter," would seem a better fit for such a hard-hitting minimalist work.
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Active Shooter / The Game - by QDeathstar - 06-06-2014, 12:39 PM
RE: Active Shooter / The Game - by LorettaYoung - 06-06-2014, 12:56 PM
RE: Active Shooter / The Game - by QDeathstar - 06-06-2014, 01:00 PM
RE: Active Shooter / The Game - by LorettaYoung - 06-06-2014, 01:13 PM
RE: Active Shooter / The Game - by Isis - 06-07-2014, 11:54 AM
RE: Active Shooter / The Game - by QDeathstar - 06-07-2014, 12:26 PM
RE: Active Shooter / The Game - by outcast - 06-08-2014, 01:56 AM
RE: Active Shooter / The Game - by QDeathstar - 06-08-2014, 03:20 AM
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