#2

[just mercedes]

Edit#1-
The silver-tongued Church bells
that murmur like a mist- hyphen?
gathers in the hearts of worshipers, gather - 'bells' makes the verb form plural. Check spelling of 'worshipers'
but lifts off from the breast lift - same reason. Are you sure you need the 'off'?
of an Atheist.


Original-
The chiming of church bells
Rolls through like a mist
And weights, as leaves on the breast
Of an atheist

I think your edit has improved your poem. That's good to see!

I'm not happy with mist murmuring but I suppose, with synesthesia, you could 'hear' the roiling.

I'm not sure why Church and Atheist are capitalized. It doesn't seem necessary to me.

Cheers!