Adonis
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Interesting topic - it could use a little trimming, as well as some refining and possibly better word choices in a few spots. Try not to harp too much on wordplay, especially when it's a difficult concept to imagine.

"Coroners corners corner me" is a bit wordy to me.
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Adonis - by Jimmy Stark - 06-02-2014, 09:51 PM
RE: Adonis - by QDeathstar - 06-03-2014, 01:38 AM
RE: Adonis - by LorettaYoung - 06-04-2014, 11:11 AM
RE: Adonis - by Tiger the Lion - 06-03-2014, 10:24 AM
RE: Adonis - by Jimmy Stark - 06-03-2014, 10:36 AM
RE: Adonis - by QDeathstar - 06-03-2014, 10:53 AM
RE: Adonis - by Tiger the Lion - 06-03-2014, 12:55 PM
RE: Adonis - by shy_symphony - 06-06-2014, 05:18 AM
RE: Adonis - by Brownlie - 06-06-2014, 06:29 AM
RE: Adonis - by kmatrixg - 06-06-2014, 05:47 PM



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