06-05-2014, 09:37 PM
Hi, Q, first a disclaimer: I am just learning meter myself and and my untrained ear can sometimes twist something into working that is actually wrong. That said, an anapest is da da DUM. I've starred lines that sound correct to me, the rest I'm pretty sure is off. Just don't use me as a source in an argument.
(06-05-2014, 12:03 PM)Qdeathstar Wrote: The middle of the night was silent,
A whisper the sole sense in between
two sleeping lover's dreams left un-spoke
and the shame they both felt as they woke. *maybe, both is a problem
As the dew left a milky wet coat *This sounds right to me.
on each blade of uncut morning grass,
they both started for home to forget *again, both is iffy for me
The mistakes they mistook for passion.
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