Female Exploitation…a tale for today(edit 0.00002, blake,brownlie)

[LorettaYoung]

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I was unclear about "type real slow" and "drop your tissue down the drain": it has good sound and your facile use of words is amazing. Loretta

Perhaps you should not know of such things loretta
It was the pan (wc) not the drain.
Best,
tectak

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tectak: "pan" sorry. I am never reluctant to learn, or surprised at anything;
I'm all grown up, but for sure haven't been everywhere; I'd like to know, understand, particularly because it's such a good poem. Best, Loretta

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The fact that this is in perfect meter makes it read like a rhyme; there is wonderful sound and flow. Do you have other hidden secrets of form in here I'd like to learn? And the topic fits everywhere. Best, Loretta

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I like this poem for the content and the freshness. Both the idea of porn being an exploitation of men and the casual third person, lust- less treatment of a sexual theme are real highlights.

I particularly enjoyed the rhyming questions that start the stanzas, and i wish that they had been used throughout. However, the first stanza is flimsy. It introduces the subject with too many abstractions, such as the generic "this" and " thoughts", which may reference to anything.

"A working night a week will keep
the other wolves from other doors. "

These lines are confusing. Perhaps she is good enough at her job to prevent other ladies of fortune from cashing in?

I also noted, after several reads, that the poem is a little jarring rather than fluid. This may be due to the weak first word of most lines composed oF, conjunction s and articles.

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Hi Kindof: one night a week pays her bills in style and she doesn't have to worry about STD's, or other tricks. Lorettta