06-05-2014, 04:18 AM
It's true that the 'mullet" spans generations, but it started (for our concerns) in the 70's. It was edgy in the 70's. The Stones also span the generations.
"By the way, are you trying to pull off Daltry's defiant/repressed youth swaggering stutter in that title or splay out a locus of linked genes? A s-s-stutter is usually designated by a first letter repeat like in the Who song: I'm 'just talkin' 'bout my g-g-g-generation.' I'm not certain what you are trying to demonstrate in that odd stutter of a title."
The answer would be yes. I was going for a bit of irony, using a 1965 song as the title of a poem about the 70's. And yes, I was trying to imitate Daltry's stutter, I was just unsure how I should write it. I didn't really spend much time on that, your way of writing it is probably better.
"Maybe a greater trilogy (60s-70s-80s) would do better justice to your theme." Actually this is the third poem in a series called "generational sketches". "Golden Age" is about the fifties, and "Helter Skelter" is about the sixties. There are probably twenty or more poems I've written under that general title.
"The psychedelia never plays well off of disco or Springsteen." I think maybe you're missing the point, or maybe that sentence doesn't mean what you intended. This is a compare and contrast between the 60's and the 70's, plus I never mentioned "psychedelia". So I'm not sure what you mean
Thanks for putting in the time on this one, it is somewhat big. I'm trying to put these poems to bed, or at least to sleep
, so expect to see others from this series in here from time to time.
Thanks again,
Dale
ella,
This is talking about the 70's in relation to the 60's. The line about Springsteen is referring to an article in Rolling Stone magazine, where they call Springsteen the next Bob Dylan. So the "they" in "Maybe Springsteen, they said he was going to be the next Bob Dylan" is "Rolling Stone". The speaker is tentative, trying to offer up things from the seventies that compare favorably to the 60's.
"This line "wore shorts too short, our hair in a Mullet, and socks pulled up to our knees." gets me lost as to Who you are talking about." Refers to the "we" at the start of the sentence:
"We were proud to collect and never put away, high priced concert tees"
AKA people who grew up in the seventies.
"My generation did not do the mullet, they sort of let that period pass" in the 70's most rock musicians were wearing Mullets, from Paul McCarthy, to Rod Stewart.
Thanks for the crit,
xoxoxoxo
Dale
"By the way, are you trying to pull off Daltry's defiant/repressed youth swaggering stutter in that title or splay out a locus of linked genes? A s-s-stutter is usually designated by a first letter repeat like in the Who song: I'm 'just talkin' 'bout my g-g-g-generation.' I'm not certain what you are trying to demonstrate in that odd stutter of a title."
The answer would be yes. I was going for a bit of irony, using a 1965 song as the title of a poem about the 70's. And yes, I was trying to imitate Daltry's stutter, I was just unsure how I should write it. I didn't really spend much time on that, your way of writing it is probably better.
"Maybe a greater trilogy (60s-70s-80s) would do better justice to your theme." Actually this is the third poem in a series called "generational sketches". "Golden Age" is about the fifties, and "Helter Skelter" is about the sixties. There are probably twenty or more poems I've written under that general title.
"The psychedelia never plays well off of disco or Springsteen." I think maybe you're missing the point, or maybe that sentence doesn't mean what you intended. This is a compare and contrast between the 60's and the 70's, plus I never mentioned "psychedelia". So I'm not sure what you mean
Thanks for putting in the time on this one, it is somewhat big. I'm trying to put these poems to bed, or at least to sleep
, so expect to see others from this series in here from time to time. Thanks again,
Dale
ella,
This is talking about the 70's in relation to the 60's. The line about Springsteen is referring to an article in Rolling Stone magazine, where they call Springsteen the next Bob Dylan. So the "they" in "Maybe Springsteen, they said he was going to be the next Bob Dylan" is "Rolling Stone". The speaker is tentative, trying to offer up things from the seventies that compare favorably to the 60's.
"This line "wore shorts too short, our hair in a Mullet, and socks pulled up to our knees." gets me lost as to Who you are talking about." Refers to the "we" at the start of the sentence:
"We were proud to collect and never put away, high priced concert tees"
AKA people who grew up in the seventies.
"My generation did not do the mullet, they sort of let that period pass" in the 70's most rock musicians were wearing Mullets, from Paul McCarthy, to Rod Stewart.
Thanks for the crit,
xoxoxoxo
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.