Men of Moments (edit 1)

[tmanzano]

Hi, t, welcome back. For me this is absolutely clear. Here are some notes.

He said he was
barbecuing chicken

My Mom would usually
chop them into stews
that would last

My Step-Dad
was working again
and on a good run-

wasting them
for one meal
was a statement

A man of moments
Great start, you make me know this man.

I grew up enough
to throw him down stairs
and out of houses

We ate vegetable stew
and listened to pastors
Shows how he needed to be removed yet the family was worse off in some ways. Pastors is a little blank, shallow.

He lived in cars
and on concrete -
I think the next lines would work better for me if you switched cars and concrete.

not like
the Volkswagen Rabbit
he wore flip flops
and corduroy shorts in
that cranked Boz Scaggs
and The Little River Band
when we met

When the garbage men found him
behind a dumpster
wearing his liver on his jacket Clear cause of death, great line.
my Mom paced for answers

I listened
to Boz Scaggs
with Jim Beam
Honoring the dead in the way of the dead. Explains the title and his influence on the narrator in their love/hate relationship.

Thanks for the interesting read. Heartbreaking.

Thank you for the comments. I see the Pastor Stanza is a common comment and still needs work and have been thinking about this line for two days now. You really got the idea on this... "love/hate" is exactly it. Sorry it has taken me a while to get back, I work incredibly long hours and will take a few days before I have time to write again. I will work on this line. I will also be thinking about the concrete/car switch... interesting take, however, I wanted to portray the progression from cars to streets... The most fascinating is that you captured the title. This was very pleasing to me. I attempt to be purposeful with words, and sometimes they blow up on me. Back to thinking...