06-04-2014, 04:52 PM
I think the removed words makes it flow better and it just sounds nicer. I do think it needs more grammar since it not only give the reader time to breathe, it can give certain lines or words more impact.
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Cotton Candy Sheep - by Pyxx - 06-04-2014, 09:00 AM
RE: Cotton Candy Sheep - by rowens - 06-04-2014, 09:19 AM
RE: Cotton Candy Sheep - by Pyxx - 06-04-2014, 09:33 AM
RE: Cotton Candy Sheep - by rowens - 06-04-2014, 09:37 AM
RE: Cotton Candy Sheep - by Pyxx - 06-04-2014, 09:40 AM
RE: Cotton Candy Sheep - by rowens - 06-04-2014, 09:43 AM
RE: Cotton Candy Sheep - by Pyxx - 06-04-2014, 09:52 AM
RE: Cotton Candy Sheep - by Sachelcharges - 06-04-2014, 04:52 PM
RE: Cotton Candy Sheep - by Pyxx - 06-04-2014, 04:55 PM
RE: Cotton Candy Sheep - by ChristopherSea - 06-04-2014, 07:16 PM
RE: Cotton Candy Sheep - by Pyxx - 06-04-2014, 10:04 PM
RE: Cotton Candy Sheep - by ellajam - 06-04-2014, 07:24 PM
RE: Cotton Candy Sheep - by tectak - 06-04-2014, 10:41 PM
RE: Cotton Candy Sheep - by Pyxx - 06-05-2014, 10:26 AM
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