06-04-2014, 11:23 AM
(05-27-2014, 10:32 AM)Qdeathstar Wrote: Edit 2
Sense Ending
Inhale
Air
Wet. Cool. Still.
Scratch
Stone
Hard. Cruel. Real.
Grasp
Steel
Rust. Cage. Seal.
Taste
Fate
Last. Culled. Meal.
Know
Death
See. Truth. Kneel.
edit 1
Inhale
air.
Wet. Cool. Still.
Scratch
skin.
Hard. Cracked. Pale.
Grasp
steel.
Rust. Cringe. Seal.
Taste
fate.
Last. Culled. Meal.
Know
death.
See. Truth. Kneel.
Original
Inhale
Air
Wet. Cool. Still.
Scratch
Stone
Hard. Cruel. Real.
Grasp
Steel
Rust. Cage. Shrill.
Taste
Fate
Last. Cold. Meal.
Know
Death
See. Truth. Kneel.
(06-04-2014, 11:23 AM)LorettaYoung Wrote:(05-27-2014, 10:32 AM)Qdeathstar Wrote: Edit 2
Sense Ending
Inhale
Air
Wet. Cool. Still.
Scratch
Stone
Hard. Cruel. Real.
Grasp
Steel
Rust. Cage. Seal.
Taste
Fate
Last. Culled. Meal.
Know
Death
See. Truth. Kneel.
edit 1
Inhale
air.
Wet. Cool. Still.
Scratch
skin.
Hard. Cracked. Pale.
Grasp
steel.
Rust. Cringe. Seal.
Taste
fate.
Last. Culled. Meal.
Know
death.
See. Truth. Kneel.
Original
Inhale
Air
Wet. Cool. Still.
Scratch
Stone
Hard. Cruel. Real.
Grasp
Steel
Rust. Cage. Shrill.
Taste
Fate
Last. Cold. Meal.
Know
Death
See. Truth. Kneel.
Hi Q: like the 2nd edit. At first the minimalism of it overwhelmed it but now it is quick and easy and flows to the mouth of the river. Best, Loretta