06-04-2014, 11:03 AM
(06-03-2014, 02:42 AM)metalfan91 Wrote: "You must go! You don't belong here anymore!
You will flee to the lands of the West.
You must become the un-inhabitants,
For our destiny to manifest.
This world was granted to us by powers up high,
By steel and by plague, you shall abide!"
Your beasts and machines bring terror to us;
Your iron fist concealed by velvet glove.
Our lands now bear the names of your oft-gloried ones:
Conquerors who've slain our daughters and sons.
Please leave, go away! Here's no glory for us.
Stay your hand, brothers, this can still be undone.
"Fools! Savages! You haven't the sense
to claim your home on our continents.
We've come to civilize and feed the holy flame,
This wild, ancient, fertile place,
All for us to tame."
Obviously your title and reference to the holy flame indicates a religious context, but other factor point to envioronment, history and conquered people. Could you elaborate please? I feel disjointed by line breaks when reading, although there are some good lines, I feel a lot are forced and have trouble relating them. I do sense the stretch for form. Best, Loretta