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Arrogance? (No Relation)
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06-04-2014, 04:27 AM
I also found "inside instead" made the last line akward. Though to me it get's a better flow and get's less akward if it gets a comma, or colon between so it's "inside, instead". I think it's overall good though, and i can't really think of much i can say about it except that it's good
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Arrogance? (No Relation) - by Wjames - 06-02-2014, 09:45 AM
RE: Arrogance? (No Relation) - by ellajam - 06-02-2014, 10:36 AM
RE: Arrogance? (No Relation) - by Wjames - 06-02-2014, 10:55 AM
RE: Arrogance? (No Relation) - by QDeathstar - 06-02-2014, 11:04 AM
RE: Arrogance? (No Relation) - by Erthona - 06-02-2014, 12:05 PM
RE: Arrogance? (No Relation) - by Brownlie - 06-02-2014, 12:29 PM
RE: Arrogance? (No Relation) - by Wjames - 06-02-2014, 12:36 PM
RE: Arrogance? (No Relation) - by MT-EMPTY - 06-04-2014, 04:27 AM
RE: Arrogance? (No Relation) - by shy_symphony - 06-05-2014, 02:44 AM
RE: Arrogance? (No Relation) - by sandraleigh05 - 06-19-2014, 01:37 PM
RE: Arrogance? (No Relation) - by Cherrie666pie - 06-24-2014, 04:37 AM
RE: Arrogance? (No Relation) - by CorneliusFerguson - 06-24-2014, 05:51 AM
RE: Arrogance? (No Relation) - by tomoffing - 06-24-2014, 10:58 AM
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