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I put effort into this one.

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06-04-2014, 04:11 AM

I generally like this poem, I think it should be "you".
The form is odd, I don't think putting it into paragraphs adds anything to the poem

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I put effort into this one. - by vtsai01 - 06-02-2014, 02:23 PM

RE: I put effort into this one. - by tectak - 06-02-2014, 03:00 PM

RE: I put effort into this one. - by Erthona - 06-02-2014, 03:09 PM

RE: I put effort into this one. - by Jimmy Stark - 06-02-2014, 10:00 PM

RE: I put effort into this one. - by metalfan91 - 06-03-2014, 02:07 AM

RE: I put effort into this one. - by MT-EMPTY - 06-04-2014, 04:06 AM

RE: I put effort into this one. - by QDeathstar - 06-04-2014, 04:11 AM

RE: I put effort into this one. - by Celestina Waters - 07-19-2014, 09:07 AM

RE: I put effort into this one. - by KROD - 07-21-2014, 09:26 AM

RE: I put effort into this one. - by poetryattempted - 07-29-2014, 10:26 AM

RE: I put effort into this one. - by ellajam - 08-01-2014, 07:07 PM

RE: I put effort into this one. - by KerouacJack - 08-19-2014, 09:11 AM

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