I Cede You Peace

I Cede You Peace

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#20

06-03-2014, 02:14 AM

I like the idea of "ceding peace" instead of passion. I don't know which I would choose. I guess everyone should have both if all is good.
Also, I don' think you should change the "disturb the piece" part. It sounds fine. The rhymes were spot-on as well. Great work.

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I Cede You Peace - by LorettaYoung - 05-11-2014, 11:39 PM

RE: I Cede You Peace - by tectak - 05-12-2014, 12:52 AM

RE: I Cede You Peace - by Erthona - 05-12-2014, 05:25 AM

RE: I Cede You Peace - by nb - 05-12-2014, 05:53 AM

RE: I Cede You Peace - by abu nuwas - 05-12-2014, 06:03 AM

RE: I Cede You Peace - by SuicidalBlueJay - 05-12-2014, 11:20 AM

RE: I Cede You Peace - by billy - 05-12-2014, 05:42 PM

RE: I Cede You Peace - by ellajam - 05-12-2014, 09:04 PM

RE: I Cede You Peace - by tectak - 05-12-2014, 10:52 PM

RE: I Cede You Peace - by abu nuwas - 05-13-2014, 02:53 AM