Arrogance? (No Relation)

[Brownlie]

Well, I like what the poem is saying. If I'm interpreting it correctly, it basically sums up a what may be said in a 12 page piece of criticism.


I’m working nights with brain-dead oafs
who live to smoke on break;
they’re rough and tumble friendly folks,
but I just can’t relate.

I don’t hack darts or throw my fists
or scrounge for strange between my shifts,
I write and sing and cry inside instead. -- Inside instead is a little awkward. Maybe Instead, I write and sing and cry inside. However, there are too many ands if you were writing prose you would only use and for the last item in a list

I like how you switched up the form in the middle of the poem that was interesting. The idiom also added a certain tone to the writing. Good post.