Arrogance? (No Relation)

[Wjames]

Hi, W, I'm really enjoying this. I can't think of any useful critique, but for me the off rhymes work well, they're interesting and seem effortless. I like "scrounge for strange" for the sound of it and the questions it opens up. I think the last line stops it dead, as it should. Very effective, thanks for the read.

I’m working nights with brain-dead oafs
who live to smoke on break;
they’re rough and tumble friendly folks,
but I just can’t relate.

I don’t hack darts or throw my fists
or scrounge for strange between my shifts,
I write and sing and cry inside instead.

I'm glad you liked it, I wrote the first stanza while on break. I tend not to write things about real-life, but I like this one, so I might try and do it more often.