Pipe Dream

[bena]

lots of good imagery here, but it does get a bit ambiguous at times. You've already received a lot of good crits so I've not got much to add except that the "anchor's cast" thing can be fixed by not having the line split with white space. There is no crime in the way it sits now, but it did cause me to stumble, and therefore took me out of the poem for just a brief moment.

Good writing, though.

bena