05-31-2014, 04:05 AM
Tom,
"and we it’s faded embers.I forgive you this cliche as you probably coined it originally and I'll fight anyone who says otherwise"
Quite right, although I don't like to brag!
"Who're stands readily for "Who are" but less so for Who were. Could you bring yourself to write, "Men who were over there..."
Yes I think you're right, or you were right when you wrote it, but yes, I'll take it on board to eliminate any confusion.
"Sorry about this but counting physics mass just bugs me. I'm not a proper scientist but..." "Hair mass physics" was in vogue during the seventies, but faded when it was discovered that one had to calculate at break-neck speed to account for the volume through time transit. I think it was created/originated by the bass player in Frampton's band...or was it the guitar player from Queen (he does have a degree in physics, not to mention a quantity of hair mass himself").
"The thems are getting a bit much" We shall excise "thems", that is to say taxes thems out of existences. It shall be done...!
Yes to all the grammatical corrections.
"conditionality of the "but"....so weak you could just drop it." Yes, after re-reading it I think so too.
Thanks Tom, much help as always, will take on-board all if not most of your suggestion
Dale
LorettaYoung, "There is the remnant, though fading, that maintains the reins of that generation"
Yes it is like the Pirate King said when questioned by Fred-er-rick about "Ruth". "There are the remnants of a fine woman about her..." ...and the beat goes on!
Dale
"and we it’s faded embers.I forgive you this cliche as you probably coined it originally and I'll fight anyone who says otherwise"
Quite right, although I don't like to brag!
"Who're stands readily for "Who are" but less so for Who were. Could you bring yourself to write, "Men who were over there..."
Yes I think you're right, or you were right when you wrote it, but yes, I'll take it on board to eliminate any confusion.
"Sorry about this but counting physics mass just bugs me. I'm not a proper scientist but..." "Hair mass physics" was in vogue during the seventies, but faded when it was discovered that one had to calculate at break-neck speed to account for the volume through time transit. I think it was created/originated by the bass player in Frampton's band...or was it the guitar player from Queen (he does have a degree in physics, not to mention a quantity of hair mass himself").
"The thems are getting a bit much" We shall excise "thems", that is to say taxes thems out of existences. It shall be done...!
Yes to all the grammatical corrections.
"conditionality of the "but"....so weak you could just drop it." Yes, after re-reading it I think so too.
Thanks Tom, much help as always, will take on-board all if not most of your suggestion
Dale
LorettaYoung, "There is the remnant, though fading, that maintains the reins of that generation"
Yes it is like the Pirate King said when questioned by Fred-er-rick about "Ruth". "There are the remnants of a fine woman about her..."
...and the beat goes on!Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.