Asahi

[olive_morphia]

This poem is like one breath, which is cool. I like that, like a fleeting thought. What is "Asahi cold"? I don't think it's necessarily important that you spell out EXACTLY what/who this is, but maybe a little detail would be good. Is Asahi a type of beer maybe? Or a cold person? Or a mountaintop? No clue. What is this lover dreaming about?

Also, I'm not sure if uneasiness is what you were going for... but the fact that the possible love-thought was not reciprocated makes me sad. Was this the intention?