05-29-2014, 11:14 AM
Ah whore-ration, I nuded him well! 
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Chris, I see what you are saying, yet I see no way around it.
"When I first saw
him instead of picking him up
with toilet paper and flushing him,
I let it go a day."
If I did not insert "TP" one might presume I would pick him up barehanded. Only someone who was not revolted by said bug would do so.
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"A day later while sitting on the toilet
I noticed him again, "
Again, alas the toilet, but without being enthroned for a time, there would be no time to observe and contemplate, and as empathy does not appear instantly but develops over time, time was of the excrement (sorry, I am as constant as the American standard*, et tu brute?).
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"I finished with the toilet,
and got a piece of paper towel."
Well, one must finish what one starts. You will notice I got the heavier "paper towel" to use as a death shroud, no more flimsy toilet paper.
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"and dropped him in the toilet"
Well of course one would drop and flush, being in the bathroom, anything else would seem ludicrous. He was given a burial at sea.
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SO, although I see what you mean at first flush...er...blush, that the word "toilet" and it's variations is used often, it is used often with purpose, and not simply ad hoc as one might use a paper plate as a Frisbee. I suppose I could use "commode" one of the times, but people generally call the object by one name, and it does not seem very realistic to alternate words simply because it is a poetic convention, especially when it flies in the face of reality.
However, I am all for brevity, as you know....well, except in prose, so if you could offer some specific judicious trimming I would be more than happy to consider it, but as of the moment, I am not sure what to cut that I find non-essential. Maybe some distance will help, it usually does.
Thank you for your time,
Dale
*American Standard, a common brand of toilet.
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Chris, I see what you are saying, yet I see no way around it.
"When I first saw
him instead of picking him up
with toilet paper and flushing him,
I let it go a day."
If I did not insert "TP" one might presume I would pick him up barehanded. Only someone who was not revolted by said bug would do so.
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"A day later while sitting on the toilet
I noticed him again, "
Again, alas the toilet, but without being enthroned for a time, there would be no time to observe and contemplate, and as empathy does not appear instantly but develops over time, time was of the excrement (sorry, I am as constant as the American standard*, et tu brute?).
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"I finished with the toilet,
and got a piece of paper towel."
Well, one must finish what one starts. You will notice I got the heavier "paper towel" to use as a death shroud, no more flimsy toilet paper.
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"and dropped him in the toilet"
Well of course one would drop and flush, being in the bathroom, anything else would seem ludicrous. He was given a burial at sea.
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SO, although I see what you mean at first flush...er...blush, that the word "toilet" and it's variations is used often, it is used often with purpose, and not simply ad hoc as one might use a paper plate as a Frisbee. I suppose I could use "commode" one of the times, but people generally call the object by one name, and it does not seem very realistic to alternate words simply because it is a poetic convention, especially when it flies in the face of reality.
However, I am all for brevity, as you know....well, except in prose, so if you could offer some specific judicious trimming I would be more than happy to consider it, but as of the moment, I am not sure what to cut that I find non-essential. Maybe some distance will help, it usually does.
Thank you for your time,
Dale
*American Standard, a common brand of toilet.
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.