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Your Hearth
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05-27-2014, 05:57 AM
You have some interesting lines here but they don't really take the poem any further than the first stanza, I think you have over used "hearth" and you have quite a few cliche lines that could do with a look at. I read it like a prayer, were the congregation are expected to say "Still I follow....of your hearth" Hope this helps, Keith
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Your Hearth - by RiverNotch - 05-27-2014, 12:01 AM
RE: Your Hearth - by Keith - 05-27-2014, 05:57 AM
RE: Your Hearth - by RiverNotch - 05-28-2014, 12:37 AM
RE: Your Hearth - by 71degrees - 05-27-2014, 08:56 AM
RE: Your Hearth - by ChristopherSea - 05-28-2014, 08:12 PM
RE: Your Hearth - by Brownlie - 05-29-2014, 01:07 AM
RE: Your Hearth - by RiverNotch - 06-02-2014, 04:23 PM
RE: Your Hearth - by Isis - 06-02-2014, 03:54 AM
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