05-26-2014, 11:32 PM
I don't think that edit helps the poem.
Im glad i did, perhaps the poem needs a better hook.
(05-25-2014, 12:51 PM)Erthona Wrote: Water-bugThat would be my edit, but i have no strong feeling about this. I came into this topic 3-4 times before deciding to invest time in reading about cockroaches.
I hate cockroaches,
especially the big water-bug types
we have in Austin
that get three—four inches long.
One of the biggest I’d ever seen
was laying in my bathtub on his back.
I thought he was dead.
I had sprayed my house recently.
Every time I do,
I find big dead ones
all about for a day or two.
When I first saw
him instead of picking him up
with toilet paper and flushing him,
I let it go a day. Forgetting.
A day later while sitting on the toilet
I noticed him again,
but this time his feelers moved,
and then as I moved around to see better
his legs started to move about.
Somehow I knew,
that he knew,
death was near.
I finished with the toilet,
and got a piece of paper towel.
He continued to move,
and as he did so
I contemplated catching him
and letting him go,
although I knew he was dead already.
I laid the paper towel over him
and pinched his body between my thumb and two fingers,
and dropped him in the toilet, quickly flushing,
but not quick enough
to keep a small part of me
from dying with him.
–Erthona
©2014
Im glad i did, perhaps the poem needs a better hook.

