05-26-2014, 01:02 PM
(05-19-2014, 01:11 PM)bbcashdollar Wrote: shotgun in my face:I have no idea what you are talking about. Ambiguity can be a good thing, but it is excessive in this poem. Did a girl sneak up on the narrator with a shotgun while he was sleeping? Give the reader more content.
Wreck my fucking plants.
You wreck my fucking life.
I can kill you,
Boom, you're fucking gone.
sleeping with eyes open.
maybe ten,
startled,
seeing,
then secretly awake.
terror transferred —
my eyes to hers.
she dropped the gun,
I made her cry.
what had I done?
