After Seven Years

[Todd]

Hi, so a nice surprise in this one with some good line breaks. Here are a few comments.

She hears him lift another can,
pour the beer into a tall glass--This detail actually gives him a sense of refinement which plays against the stereotype.
as sure as her key slips into a lock.--I keep wanting the "a" to be a "the"

She dislikes this plastic paradise
of comb and mirror, the thickening--like the break here though throughout I think the breaks really work especially in S2.
scars, the courted sleep.

Arguments are all her mind recalls lately:
the fists, the remedy afterward. She does
remember an August marriage, his dark
good looks. And now sitting beside this bed
of snow, the room is a jail cell. Outside
her window, on a thin black telephone wire,
is a mourning dove with her mother's eyes.--these last two lines with the dove image are the payoff that elevates this one. The wire is like the line she crossed. The mother's eyes suggest that it could be generational. You don't get the sense of guilt or reprimand just the sadness, or maybe understanding. I realize my read is a bit subjective on this point

Its very nice.

Best,

Todd