Shanty Song Edit One (Thanks to all who provided feedback)

[Brownlie]

it reminds me too much of the drunken sailor to stick with it
if it was perverted, or had no reference to the original i'd probably like what you did, but for me it just feels a few words have been changes. i can see some greek allusion, but not enough to clear the drunken sailor away.

Well, I appreciate your comment and I think you make a good point. The idea I was going for was to make a shanty about a shanty singer because a shanty is meant to be a work song, but I don't really know enough about the genre to compose one from scratch if any one knows if there is a specific form for the genre I would be curious to see it. For my part I mostly used this version of The Drunken Sailor performed by The Irish Rovers here are the lyrics for the original if whoever is reading is still interested.

What will we do with a drunken sailor?
What will we do with a drunken sailor?
What will we do with a drunken sailor?
Early in the morning

Way hay and up she rises
Way hay and up she rises
Way hay and up she rises
Early in the morning

Shave his belly with a rusty razor
Shave his belly with a rusty razor
Shave his belly with a rusty razor
Early in the morning

Way hay and up she rises
Way hay and up she rises
Way hay and up she rises
Early in the morning

Put him in a long boat till he's sober
Put him in a long boat till he's sober
Put him in a long boat till he's sober
Early in the morning

Way hay and up she rises
Way hay and up she rises
Way hay and up she rises
Early in the morning

Stick him in a barrel with a hosepipe on him
Stick him in a barrel with a hosepipe on him
Stick him in a barrel with a hosepipe on him
Early in the morning

Way hay and up she rises
Way hay and up she rises
Way hay and up she rises
Early in the morning

Put him in the bed with the captain's daughter
Put him in the bed with the captain's daughter
Put him in the bed with the captain's daughter
Early in the morning

Way hay and up she rises
Way hay and up she rises
Way hay and up she rises
Early in the morning

That's what we do with a drunken sailor
That's what we do with a drunken sailor
That's what we do with a drunken sailor
Early in the morning

Way hay and up she rises
Way hay and up she rises
Way hay and up she rises
Early in the morning

Way hay and up she rises
Way hay and up she rises
Way hay and up she rises
Early in the morning
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I wanted it to sound like the lyrics posted so I went to a haphazard reforming of the song to fit my purposes reworking what I took to be some trochaic starts, some spondees and whatnot. Perhaps there is some better way to go about this project maybe at least changing the refrain "early in the morning"... Thanks for commenting.