05-24-2014, 12:48 PM
(04-24-2014, 10:58 AM)expiring_touch Wrote: On this night I sit
in the back alley of dreams, of two-some minds
in mid-spring bloom - right now
when we none of us can fail or care
to know the future.
we cant be wrong, we don't have rules, we're with each other, here and now
I knew your face before, it sang
beneath the shades of unsung trees
etched on my life line –
i was with you once
eyes for embers and mouth for mirror
covered with black velvet.
didnt like it
I started like a bird this night, a cooling drift
across my midriff; and all that was,
was fair, we've come
full circle.
we have a chance to start again
I feel that this poem is talking about the feeling you have right before your a "confirmed couple" and that the author has a chance to start again, to gain that feeling again.
However, it feels like it lacks emotion. Almost like the author wants to believe in "that feeling" again, but hasn't truly experienced it.

