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Guilt
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05-24-2014, 10:57 AM
(05-23-2014, 09:11 AM)rowens Wrote: Pseudoguilt I think this poem is in need of a refrain. Its so long you kinda get muddled in the middle of it about what it's point is. I think the last stanza would make a good refrain, if it was reworked a little bit to add beat. I also think if you were to make the poem in third person, it would be more engaging the reader. No one really cares about you, but if they can connect it to them, they might be more engaged. |
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Guilt - by rowens - 05-23-2014, 09:11 AM
RE: Guilt - by rowens - 05-24-2014, 02:00 AM
RE: Guilt - by rowens - 05-24-2014, 02:20 AM
RE: Guilt - by rowens - 05-24-2014, 02:31 AM
RE: Guilt - by rowens - 05-24-2014, 02:43 AM
RE: Guilt - by rowens - 05-24-2014, 03:00 AM
RE: Guilt - by rowens - 05-24-2014, 03:10 AM
RE: Guilt - by rowens - 05-24-2014, 07:30 AM
RE: Guilt - by QDeathstar - 05-24-2014, 10:57 AM
RE: Guilt - by kindofahippy - 05-24-2014, 11:24 AM
RE: Guilt - by JMSelden - 05-24-2014, 01:56 PM
RE: Guilt - by QDeathstar - 05-24-2014, 08:32 PM
RE: Guilt - by rowens - 05-24-2014, 11:32 PM
RE: Guilt - by trueenigma - 05-27-2014, 10:59 AM
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