I Cede You Peace

[tectak]

Hi Tictak: Do you mean L3?, Thanks, Loretta

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This just gets better and better. I only stick my suggestions up because I want to be associated with excellence
Very Best and well done,
tectak

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...but your critique is not fine. Appreciating that you are new to this could you kindly attempt to say something about the piece that would help the writer. Perhaps if you had looked up "cede" in advance you could have made an informed comment on the use of the word. This would help both you and the writer. That is what the site is for.
Admin

Loretta, if you should adopt tectak's colon -which sounds mildly disgusting - perhaps it would be good to use it as colons are best used, namely, to elaborate a list of what has just been stated as a generality. Thus, it might go:

''I will:
disturb the peace
in my own fashion; and
cede you your peace
in search of passion.''

By way of explanation, a simple example of using a colon like this, would be:-

'' Loretta displayed many good qualities: patience, tact, elegance of style, charm and intelligence...''

Yes, of course.
Best,
tectak